It never occurred to me that I’d need to ask this, but could you please help me edit my work? When I decided to make my progress on Hermes925 publically available, I assumed that I would be leaving myself open to criticism, and in some cases verbal abuse. I never imagined that I would receive almost no feedback at all.
I know people like it. I get ‘likes’ on both WordPress and Facebook whenever I post something new, what I’m not getting much of, is criticism. Constructive or otherwise. I kind of expected a battle. I thought people would be eager to poke holes in my work and force me decide whether I was going to defend and explain my reasons for leaving it as it is, or give into peer pressure and make acceptable alterations. I’ve received no such conflict.
I have had a couple of people suggest that I get an editor to clean up my sentences, and propose that I ask my audience to read through what I’ve done and send me any corrections they feel are necessary. So this is me asking. Please tell me what you think needs fixing in the Hermes925 narrative so far. Or any other any other part of the website for that matter.
I’m begging, not for money this time, but for feedback. In particular I want to know which sentences need work, which word choices don’t make sense or any other editorial mistakes that you’ve notices and the way that you would fix it. Bear in mind please that It’s supposed to be Jaime’s personal journal, he’s talking to a fictional audience occasionally, but mostly he’s just talking to himself. Therefore I’m going for colloquial, ‘no-one else is going to read this’ English.
It’s also based in the future, so I want to throw in some slang and cultural references that haven’t happened yet, but still make it clear from the context what he’s talking about. I think I haven’t done this enough for fear it would confuse the reader, so I’m open to suggestions on futuristic curse-words, idioms and events I can throw in.
Be brutal. Tear my sentences to pieces. Over analyse every word! That’s why I’m doing this. I’ve seen many published books, self-published and otherwise, go to print with spelling mistakes, grammar errors and clumsy sentences. I don’t want Hermes925 to be one of them. We’re beta testing the story online so that we can eliminate the bugs and correct any other mistakes, before I even take it to a publisher.
For those of you who object to working for free, tell me what you want in return. Maybe I can write you an article, or help you with your own project, or just give you credit on an acknowledgements page. Even if you don’t think I could offer you anything you’d want, let’s talk it over anyway. I’m sure we can figure something out. My contact info is listed under Contact Me.
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I look forward to hearing from you. I really mean it. Please.
Have a great day. 🙂